Thursday, October 26, 2006

The paragraph for shopping way

Writing Process Prompts
1.Understanding the assignment
Assignment: Discuss the shopping habit of woman
Length: 200-300words
Due date: 1/23
Narrowed topic:Shopping habit of woman

2.Determining the writing context and formulating a main idea
Purpose: Inform
Audience: Woman
Tone: Humorous
Tentative main idea: Shopping way of woman has many kinds

3.Generating supporting ideas:

4.Organizing ideas:
Map Templte:
Topic Sentence: Shopping way

Nowadays, going shopping is not only an economic activity, but also a recreational activity for women. There are three main places where women can choose to go shopping: the department sotres, the shopping malls, and the Internet shops.

The department store offers comfortable facility, good service and luxurious equipment. The dpartment store shows the latest fashion and what is most popular of the world. All articles of fine quality are very beautiful, including many band of worldwide. But the price of goods are much more expensive than those in the shopping mall. So, it is hard for women to control budget, Sometimes they would spend more than they should .

The advantage of the shopping mall is it very convenient. It has facilities such as the parking space and the supermarket. Many kinds of goods are often on sale. People can buy things at a cheaper price.

The website shopping is modern way. If you have a computer, you can go shopping at home. Overall you use the website to buy products for all countries in the world. The shopper is almost young ladies.

1 comment:

Yuhsiuwriting said...

Well done!


Discuss for the shipping habit of woman

shipping-->shopping
-->delete 'for'

The woman shopping way has three channel:
-->This is your topic sentence?
-->Nowadays, going shopping is not only an economic activity, but also a recreational activity for women. There are three main places where women can choose to go shopping: the department sotres, the shopping malls, and the Internet shops.


Department store that it offer comfortable facility, good service and luxurious equipment.
-->The Department store offers...

It shows the fashion and popular of the world.
-->The department store shows the latest fashion and what is most popular ...


All articles of fine quality are very beautiful including many band of worldwide.
-->, including...

But the price is very expensive than the shopping mall.
-->the prices of goods are much more expensive than those in the shopping mall.


So all woman hard to control budget, sometime spend much money to buy the goods.
-->So, it is hard for women to ...
Sometimes they would spend more than they should.

The advantage of shopping mall is very convenience.
-->of the shopping mall is it it very convenient.

Such as park car, supply and supermarket.
-->It has facilities such as the parking space and the supermarket.


It is often on sale many kinds article. That bring to everybody a good life.
--> Many kinds of goods are often on sale. People can buy things at a cheaper price.

Only you have a computer, you can be shopping at home.
-->If you have a computer, you can go shopping...

Overall you use the website to buy products for all country of world.
-->from all countries in the world.


The shopper is almost young man.
-->? We are talking abot women here? Why do you mention 'young men'?